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Kurt Stein's avatar

“The old man drew in a deep breath, tasting the air like wine. It caught in him. A fishhook of heaven.” This is excellent. Fishhook of heaven is gonna stick with me. Kinda perfect image. Well done

D.B. Taylor's avatar

Thanks Kurt. Yah I liked that line too.

Parker McCoy's avatar

Grandpa had had enough. I think most of us will reach that point. Very moving, DB.

Jane Killingbeck's avatar

Beautifully evoked moments .

Mikayah Fry's avatar

I love this story! Great job!

Erron Adams's avatar

So utterly beautiful, thanks.

Michael Ross's avatar

Poetic and bitingly soft.

Leonorra Dainler's avatar

“The wind bites the faces of the living. The closest thing we have to ghosts punches.” This is such an evocative image. The veil of life and death thinning right in front of two ends of the human life spectrum. So good. Thank you for sharing.